Just as way of an explanation, this story is from my facebook page. I was given 13 words that I had to use within a romantic story. These words are the ones that are highlighted in bold:
It was
unfair, why did it have to be like this?. You wait your whole life
for love and when you find it everything becomes difficult. I had
always considered myself a normal member of society and not prone to
unnatural urges. Here in Milan, walking along side the
Naviglio Pavese, I looked into those dark waters and sought peace. I
found it all so annoying,
wrestling with my
conscience like this.
Aubrianna was her name and I had met her whilst I was out walking.
Taking a pause to shake a stone out of my Boot,
she had sat next to me on the bench. We had struck up a conversation,
I introduced myself as Drew rather than Andrew. We
exchanged numbers and from the way my heart was racing
I had known I would call
this beautiful creature. We had gone out on a couple of dates which had
seemed to go well.
I knew it was fast but I had such strong feelings
for her that I suggested meeting up with some friends who liked to
party. I had suggested some
basic skinny dipping
as I knew that Mel and Dale were big fans. I had then suggested we
headed to Jo Jo’s as she had a real sadistic
streak. I had mentioned that
Fahmida would bring all of her toys and gadgets and if
we were lucky she would strip.
We
would really make a night of it. Aubrianna had agreed but there was
something that spoke of hesitance in her manner, I
pushed it from my mind. I had set to planning, ringing around my
friends. They
were all really keen and we set a date for the following week.
I
called Aubrianna and gave her the good news. On the phone she sounded
hesitant and suggested we meet up again first. The date had been
memorable and had led to this walk and my dilemma. Meeting
at a local café and I had ordered a strawberry
tart with my drink.
Normally when we talked the conversation flowed, today seemed to
deviate from that. I
had noticed a slight shaking in her hands and I reached out to
comfort her. She looked into my eyes across the table, she breathed
in as if to start speaking. Her mouth opened but closed without
uttering a sound. I worried over what she might say, maybe she did
not want to see me any more. When she finally plucked up enough
courage to speak, I was shocked to my core.
Aubrianna
looked around the café
furtively making sure there was no one close enough to hear. She
leaned forward and speaking in hushed tones that caused me to move
closer to hear her. I was mesmerised by her perfect lips and had
to force myself to listen. Seeing
the words form on her lips seemed to imbue them with more power, the
nervous way her tongue moistened them. I knew that I loved her then,
every detail of her beautiful face was etched in my mind. I looked up
into her eyes an saw a tear forming as she confessed to being a
deviant. I
was so shocked, I could not believe what I was hearing. Pushing my
chair away from the table I stood and told
her I needed to get some air. I needed time to think.
This
was how I found myself stood looking into these dark waters. I
watched the flow of the water and the little eddies did not calm me
as they normally did. I thought about deviants and I could not
believe this woman was one. I wanted to be with her, I had imagined
the possibility of spending my life with her. How could I do it
though? How could I be with someone who did not like whips and
chains? I mean it was not normal!. I banged my fist down on the wall
and
let out a yell of frustration. I tried to imagine courting her with a
flower, I had heard
rumours that roses
were popular. There were clubs that catered for this new thing,
places where you could spend a night with just the two and have no
toys or bondage. It was impossible to imagine a relationship without
a 'safe word'. How could people sustain a relationship without the
help of friends in satisfying each other?.
All of these thoughts went
through my head. I wondered if I could live life as a deviant,
running the risk of being attacked and cast out by my friends. As
I considered all of these facts I felt a peace that had eluded me
descend. I wanted Aubrianna and everything else was irrelevant. I
pulled my phone from my pocket and dialled her number. I heard her
voice still thick with emotion from the tears I had caused her to
shed. I told her that I wanted her, Deviant or not. I would try her
way because I loved her.
Another powerful piece; the emotions running through Drew's mind are vividly expressed.
ReplyDeleteAwesome sweetie! Thank you for my 'role'! LOL
ReplyDeleteGood story Ray!
ReplyDeleteVery clever use of all the different words! Good job!
ReplyDeleteLoved this story the first time I read it and now I love it even more..mind boggling how you fit everything in and the route you went down with this piece..keeps readers on the edge of their seats xx
ReplyDeleteGreat one... Really clever! You know, you could write a book with this idea! Love it! :) xx
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